My lyrics need opinion(s)

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Replied by Meya on topic Re: My lyrics need opinion(s)

No problem
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Ok, thanks!
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Ahhhhhh nahhhh bro, see this comes from the heart and I feel it. I have to give better comments tommorow! This is the first page I will be back to
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Alright, I write my own music so I will be posting some of my music here requesting feedback.

Thanks

Verse 1:
It's a blessing testing my ability
Allow me to express my conscience over this beat
To those who oversee, I'll never leave those in need
Got a family to feed, a legacy to seed
Condol to those who I won't show any mercy

Chorus:
No pain, no fame
Goin' to the top 'til you know my name

Notes:
I'm not done with this song yet but I would really love feedback.
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